Feedback session...

After attending the first feedback session on circular narrative i have a lot of things to consider.
The main issue with my proposal was that the police could be portrayed in the wrong way, after a lengthy discussion we came up with a solution.

Also that some of the planned images were too literal and i needed to be more subtle when telling the narrative through images. I need to make sure i keep all my images portrait so that they follow the same theme as the starting and ending image.

Here is my revised proposal...

Proposal

Working title: Behind closed doors.

After recieveing my starting image i had mixed feelings on how my circular narrative could develop. I had several initial ideas but the one that grasped me the most was a more sincere, deep and negative narrative. This was unusal for me because i'm not usually drawn towards this side of photography. 

My starting image (no.9) is of a closed door and the light from the door facing, which has been left ajar, is reflecting onto it. I wanted to create a narrative for both of the rooms and draw them in together to create a story, including the viewpoints from each character.

In the room that is slightly ajar  i want to show a happy, content working class family going about their daily routine, and in the room opposite (closed door) a child that has been abused in some way by a parent/carer. Showing the narrative developing by changing between the viewpoints of each of the characters.

I want to keep the series in black and white to help the narrative flow and keep a consistency throughout the images. 

My first image would be my given image of the doors, my second would be of the family eating breakfast looking generally happy and getting ready for school. My third image would be of the opposite room with the closed door, in this image would be a child in her bedroom curled up on her bed, the light from the window just showing subtle features of her face and a single tear under her eye. My fourth image would be of the parent of this child in the kitchen, sat at the table eating his breakfast. My fifth image would be a close up of the parents hand holding his cereal spoon showing his scarred knuckles . My sixth image would be of the family, the mother in the kitchen handing out the lunchboxes and getting ready to leave for school, my seventh image would be of the family walking out of their flat door and across the hall the abused child watching from the doorway. The final image would be the starting image of the door.

I feel this idea could become a campaign advert for childline/NSPCC etc, the message being that even people who live just across the hallway are sometimes unaware of abuse that is happening so close to them. This is why it is important for organisations like childline to have campaigns of this nature including visual posters with phone numbers, so that children have a lifeline.